perjantai 14. helmikuuta 2014

Short story assignment rough draft

Ellen had always lived in that same city. She had traveled a lot, but the place she calls home had always been in the same city. The city she was born in. She liked to be alone. It didn't bother her. That's why she usually traveled alone. She said she got more out of the trips if she went alone, no one to drag into places or to please. If she wanted to wake up and leave before the sunrise, she could. If she didn't come home before the sundown, no one would complain.
   Andrew always wanted to go with her. Just because she never let him. They had been friends forever and now he was curious what she was doing on those trips. What was so private she couldn't share with anyone else? Andrew was jealous of her. How she enjoyed her life. "Lived her life to the fullest." He was just an assistant for a CEO, who didn't appreciate his value. He was hoping, that one day, he would be the CEO. But as for now, he was organizing his papers, getting coffee, answering his phone, basically being a doormat for him. He saw hundreds of people on a daily basis but no one remembered his name. After each day, he wondered if that job would get him anywhere. But yet he still returned to that desk, every single day. 
   Ellen stared out of the window. She has just been on the phone with her mother. Holly, her 63 year old mother, who had been going strong every day, until this day. She had always been full of life, happy and doing the things she loved. She had thought Ellen that life is way too short to do something that you don't love. Now, Holly had been diagnosed with an aggressive stomach cancer. She quit her job immediately after the news. 
As Ellen was staring out of the window, she was getting flashbacks from her father's death. The phone call. The tears. Rushing to the hospital, only to discover that "there was nothing the doctor's could've done."

3 kommenttia:

  1. The main subject of this story is stomach cancer. Dramatic. Doormat. My favorite part about this piece is when her momma gets stomach cancer. This piece is like a sandwich cause it's pretty good. I think this story is good to go.

    VastaaPoista
  2. Living life to the fullest and not having any regrets
    Discouraging
    My favorite part is how Andrew is completely ignored
    This piece is like a candy bar, because it is good
    maybe talk about Ellen's adventures a bit more

    VastaaPoista
  3. 1) Subject is someone who likes to travel but has cancer
    2) Sad
    3) Word: "tears" Phrase: "there was nothing the doctor's could've done"
    4) How dramatic the last paragraph is
    5) This piece is like a funeral because it is sad
    6) Describing the cancer more

    VastaaPoista